Listen up people, there is this thing called the Mariana Trench, it is this place at the bottom of the ocean. It is so deep that if you go down there I do not think you will come back, you might get eaten by Megalodon, who is he? read paragraph 1 to see who he is ...
Paragraph 1: Animals
There is a Ginormous Shark called Megalodon, it is an enormous shark that lives in the Mariana Trench, he can kill people if you go down there. there is an octopus called a dumbo octopus That looks like a squid and is Slimy. There is this Animal that is the Shape of a Cucumber and it looks like a cucumber because it has no bones.
Paragraph 2: Black Smokers
There are these things called Black Smokers that are at the bottom of the Mariana Trench That look like volcanos .black smoke comes out of them and it helps Fish’s stay warm this is because if you go down there it's really cold. the Black Smokers help warm them up or they will get Frozen. That is what the black smokers Are for.
Paragraph 3: everything
At the bottom of the Mariana Trench, It has So much pressure that you need to have no bones to get to the bottom of the Mariana Trench, that is how much pressure there is at the bottom.
Conclusion:
Listen up people, you have read my paragraphs about the Mariana trench and how deep it is and all that stuff so now I am going to tell you some stuff about the Mariana trench. you need to have no bones to go down there that is how much pressure is down there. There is A thing called spider crabs that looks like A spider and A crab. hope you learned something.
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ReplyDeleteKia ora Olivia,
ReplyDeleteyou did some really good learning.
Oh and also in the 1st or 2nd week we started to learn about the mariana trench.In the self assessment for my writing,i really like how you did not lie.Because some people sometimes lie and say/write that they are good at everything.
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Kia ora Olivia i have enjoyed reading your mariana trench writhing i liked that you have been taking your time on it i think it looks amazing you blow my socks off great job
ReplyDeletethank you connor I am happy you like it
DeleteKia ora Olivia it is Scarlett from gilberthorpe school
ReplyDeleteI liked your marina trench story i think it is very instersting.
Hello olivil its brodie i like the way you put a lot of informations.This part gave me a memory about when i did it.why did you put that google drawing thin on ok bye.
ReplyDeletegood job you did a lot of work by the looks of it and ive done just like you have no complate everything i love.
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ReplyDeleteKia Ora Olivia, Kirsty here! This is a great blog post. I like the part where you talked about animals. I really enjoy reading stories about animals. Maybe next time you could do one about a certain animal. Do you like writing? Was this copied and pasted from a google doc?
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Hey Olivia,Cayleigh here.
ReplyDeleteYou are good at writing but next time do cupa tool at the start of the senses maybe you need to make it small.
You are good at writing.
Kia ora Olivia,
ReplyDeleteI like your writing because it has lots of information and it even has paragraphs. I thought the Megalodon was extinct because it didn't have enough food but that is an interesting fact that it lives in the Mariana Trench. The most interesting fact is that you need to have no bones to go down there because of the pressure! You could put capital letters after end of sentence punctuation next time.
Kia Ora, Olivia!
ReplyDeleteI like your writing becasue of how much you got done and how it was sorted into paragraphs! I didn't know Black Smoker things were down there! Next time you could go over it and check for grammer and spelling mistakes? Because there were a few that I could see.
From Mikayla.
Kia Ora Olivia H!
ReplyDeleteThis is a great information report! Please make sure that before you post it, you proof read your post as some of it makes no sense and there are capital letters scattered all over the wrong places. But good job!
Hi its Ethan I u have writing a lot of informing of it have u had a good day but maybe next time dont writing a lot cause some humans dont now how to read.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Olivia H,
ReplyDeleteI really like how you put a lot of effort to your work and how you said "Listen up people!" Did you think about how much effort you put in because you did a great job and you should be really proud of yourself. Just remember to be more positive and just add more capital letters after the full stop.
Blog you later from Stephanie and Nalanee.
Hey Olivia, great blog post! I loved learning about the Mariana Trench, did you not enjoy it? Why was that?
ReplyDeleteYou have included some really interesting facts to teach others about this amazing place. You really captured my attention with your introduction, it made me want to keep reading and learning more! We spent a lot of time on that, so well done. Next time you could think about your conclusion, I know we rushed that part as a class so this will be something we will focus on with our next info report, can't wait to read yours! :)
hi miss johnstone I hope you are learning stuff about the Mariana Trench
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